tanglewood tree 2
You should post your hours
mark your unavailability;
put it on a sign outside your smile
I grapple with this horizon of stars.
It’s a long way, sure
We know, you and I know
that time can be captured, and shared
but only when you want it enough.
I prioritize me
find out where I fit
and it’s somewhere way in back
of all of it.
Tonight, tonight, tonight
I hafta hold onto my anger
hold it close, it is my memory.
I hear sounds of your walls shutting down
all the good people
safe inside.
And I hafta tell you-
it’s hard to care tonight.
I’m drifting away from it.
Why wonder what becomes of worlds
I’m not a part of?
I could rise above,
or simply sink.
Down, down into the quiet
where nobody’s words
are making me wait.
ugly, dumb words.
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Tonight I’ll dream of
walking away from you
and your beautiful, pained eyes.
May 18, 2008 at 7:37 am
Beautiful, very strong and direct, rhythm some almost undetectable craft in the half rhymes, very articulate in its restraint and balance, controlled power and the music and the slideshow are perfect, the images so resonant, almost narrative. Very beautiful piece of art all together, Amuirin.
May 18, 2008 at 3:54 pm
No man or woman was ever cured of love by discovering the falseness of a lover.
May 18, 2008 at 7:26 pm
I was here. It’s one of those times when I don’t really want to leave a comment as I feel like it will ruin the beauty of what you’ve done.
May 18, 2008 at 8:40 pm
Why wonder what becomes of worlds
I’m not a part of?
I could rise above,
or simply sink.
Down, down into the quiet
where nobody’s words
are making me wait.
ugly, dumb words.
Love these lines. The whole is very emotional and these lines hold it all.
May 19, 2008 at 7:53 am
I would say what Paul has already said, also I can relate to the emotions through this piece and the line: ‘I grapple with this horizon of stars.’ is awesome, specially given that you gave it a stanza all to itself.
May 19, 2008 at 11:30 pm
words, handled well
May 21, 2008 at 12:45 am
Undulating words and thoughts, so beautiful and sad, but strong. One of your best poems.